#50 - “The Comeback” by Drew Davies - A great example of a redemption story in a song

✅ Stop guessing if your lyrics work. Learn story-first songwriting and turn every idea into music-ready lyrics with a proven, repeatable system. Join our community: Story-First Songwriting on Skool.👉 ⁠skool.com/songwriting/about⁠ You write a song that feels clever. The words are interesting. The melody works. But then people skip it.This happens when your song's first line makes a promise, but the rest of the song never delivers on it. The listener keeps guessing instead of following. And after they guess wrong a few times, they stop trying.In this breakdown of "Remedy" from Greg Amici's Tragicomic, we're looking at exactly where the line between intriguing and confusing lives. You'll see how one song can have a strong opening line hook but then hides what it's actually about. We'll look at the story structure underneath it all, and why knowing what your protagonist wants is not optional if you want people to listen.By the end, you'll have one simple test for your own songs.

✅ Stop guessing if your lyrics work. Learn story-first songwriting and turn every idea into music-ready lyrics with a proven, repeatable system. Join our community: Story-First Songwriting on Skool.👉 ⁠skool.com/songwriting/about⁠ You write one killer opening line. One line that stops people in their tracks. So you're done, right?You are gonna have a great song.Wrong.A strong opening line opens a door. And the listener walks in, and then you need to deliver on the experience promised.So, what happens after that first line decides whether you wrote a song or just a great first line."I'll Be Back" teaches this lesson perfectly. It opens with a strong hook. Then it stops being a story. We break down exactly where it happens, exactly why, and what to check for in your own writing so you catch the same gap before you put music to your words.Let me know in the comments below what you thought of this song?Lyrics are included below 👇.

✅ Stop guessing if your lyrics work. Learn story-first songwriting and turn every idea into music-ready lyrics with a proven, repeatable system. Join our community: Story-First Songwriting on Skool.👉 ⁠skool.com/songwriting/about⁠ You can have the most gorgeous image in your song. A perfect metaphor. Or a simile so specific it works wonders. And your listener still won't feel what you feel... 😬 Here's why: an image without conflict is just admiration. And admiration is boring.In this breakdown of the song "Jennifer" by Greg Amici, we're looking at the one thing that can truly mess with your song. You'll learn the difference between metaphors and similes, when to use each one, and the thing even the most beautiful imagery cannot do on its own.By the end, you'll know exactly how to audit your own songs.

✅ Stop guessing if your lyrics work. Learn story-first songwriting and turn every idea into music-ready lyrics with a proven, repeatable system. Join our community: Story-First Songwriting on Skool.👉 ⁠skool.com/songwriting/about⁠ A character with a real problem does not make a story. You need the one specific event that knocks everything off balance, and then you need 4 more.In "Tom Seaver," Greg Amici opens with a bullied kid at school, but then abandons the setup entirely and moves to baseball. There's no event that triggered the change. There's no payoff. In this training, you'll learn what's missing, why it matters, and how to avoid this trap in your own work. Watch for the moment the song loses its footing and what it costs the listener.

✅ Stop guessing if your lyrics work. Learn story-first songwriting and turn every idea into music-ready lyrics with a proven, repeatable system. Join our community: Story-First Songwriting on Skool.👉 ⁠skool.com/songwriting/about⁠ You can stack beautiful lines on top of one another, ... and still walk away with no song.Today we're breaking down "In Like a Lion" from Greg Amici's Tragicomic, and it's a a godd example to show the gap between writing well and telling a story. This song is full of genuinely strong lines.And yet it doesn't work as a story.Here's what you will discover:writing good lines and writing a story are two different skills. You can be great at one and still be missing the other.We'll walk through what "In Like a Lion" gets right, what's actually missing, and the four checks you can run on your own drafts right now to catch this trap before you're stuck with a beautiful travel diary instead of a song.If you've ever polished a line to perfection only to realize your song still feels hollow, this one's for you.