
Show Notes
Listen if you want to write tonal pivots that land on the page without a director's toolkit.
Following on from our episodes on establishing tone through action lines and through character, this is what we have been building up to: how to pull off a tonal switch… that does NOT throw the audience out of the film. And, in particular, how to pull that off on the page when writers don’t have framing, lighting, music, editing, etc. at our disposal?
With that goal in mind, Mel and Chas dissect specific moments on the pages of SHAUN OF THE DEAD, SORRY TO BOTHER YOU and SWISS ARMY MAN.
While there are definite craft tools identified - rhythm of action lines, varying use of unfilmmables and metaphors, establishing language patterns - the two big takeaways are:
(1) pulling off a tonal shift takes a lot of setup; and (2) when the time comes, contrast on the page is key.
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode.
As always: SPOILERS ABOUND and all copyright material used under fair use for educational purposes.
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"Not only does it allow us to accept the mother's death, but it allows them to really go for emotion because they've already taught us that throughout the film, there will be these moments." — Chas Fisher @ 00:00:00
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open
00:00:25 – What do we mean by tonal shift?
00:08:35 – Distinguishing between genre shift and tonal shift
00:13:08 – Shaun of the Dead
00:45:41 – Sorry to Bother You
01:28:07 – Swiss Army Man
02:02:10 – Key learnings and wrap up
02:06:35 – Patreon thanks
FILMS
SHAUN OF THE DEAD (2004) — (w) Simon Pegg, Edgar Wright (d) Edgar Wright
SORRY TO BOTHER YOU (2018) — (w) Boots Riley
SWISS ARMY MAN (2016) — (w) Daniel Kwan, Daniel Scheinert
SCRIPTS
Study the script: SHAUN OF THE DEAD (2004) — Simon Pegg, Edgar Wright
Study the script: SORRY TO BOTHER YOU (2018) — Boots Riley
Study the script: SWISS ARMY MAN (2016) — Daniel Kwan, Daniel Scheinert
SHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
Framing [between] Them: SHAUN OF THE DEAD
LINKS
YouTube: Every Frame A Painting - Edgar Wright - How to Do Visual Comedy
EPISODES IN THE TONE SERIES
DZ-117: Pulling Off Tonal Shifts
RELATED EPISODES
DZ-105: Establishing Tone through Big Print
DZ-107: Establishing Tone through Character
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